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Si's songs; any songs or things that i make
Topic Started: Feb 12 2004, 12:39 PM (461 Views)
Si
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these are all just for your enjoyment, though most of you will be able to figure out what they are about. I would really like you're input like:

1. whether you like/dislike a song
2. any improvements on the songs...lyrical etc
3. how the song makes you feel

my newest chorus:

hanging by a thread, one little slip,
and all will be gone, i stumble i trip,
the abyss is black, im falling off track
the darkness is coming i'll never go back
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Si's newest song....Keano knows what its about, sluyky you'll be able to guess from earlier, and the rest i'll explain later..(zebrahead stlye)

The one for me: (Si/04)

v1
Walking down, that dark street again, and the pain,
of seeing people looking at me,
They don't know what to do, what i've been through,
they just stand and stare

rap
god what to do, how to get through,
its been long since i loved somebody like you,
its long like japan, sounds like a plan,
helps me to be all that i can,
thinking of you, in all that i do,
i ask you out, you ask me too,
but there's a waste of mind, she'd there all the time
pissing me about and i don't know why!!

chorus
in the corner of my eye, i see you're smile and i know,
that you're the one for me,
across the crowded room you're face stands out a mile and i know,you're the one for me and I
see you just beyond the corner
my heart feels just a little warmer,
i see, that you're the one for me

v2
Running round, in my brain and the way,
people treat me is not ideal
they dont know how i feel, pain is so unreal,
they just stand and stare.

repeat rap
repeat chorus

bridge rap
blacked out, i dont know what to do,
i'm wasted passed out in my room,
she pissed me off and its a killer,
so i sit drinking my slush and miller,
i'm gonna slap her face right off,
coz she wont stop pissing me off,
i'm sitting thinking of "her" instead
thinking of that day soon we'll be wed

repeat chorus
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Splitting - by Si 03/04

The dark is splitting through the morning,
its power waning through the trees
It takes me down without warning
I fall, fall upon my knees

(you cant help me, I cant take it)

*bridge*
get me through this, get me outta here,
afraid of the dark, i cannot see
i feel myself falling, the black it surrounds me,
it wont let me free, wont let me be me

*chorus*
And I, I'm all alone, wont you listen
can i confide in you
And I, I cant help it
it wont escape from me
my past it haunts me can you see

verse 2
my sides are splitting from the pain
the feelings i have getting stranger
my thoughts they take me down the drain
they take me further into danger

*repeat bridge*
*repeat chorus*

thats it so far anyway

*i aint finished, its about that general feeling you get when you think you're life is over*
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Si
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though not done this is about a b*tch that i once thought i knew.

i wrote it today at 3.50 so its going nowhere......yet.

the ***** (angel that i once knew)

*verse*
you changed, send mixed signals all over the place,
yet you wonder why theres all this highnosity,
you dont act the same, tears run down you're face
you think the way i act is such an attrosity

*rap*
get to f*ck, you've ran out of luck,
if i swing for you you have to duck,
cry in the common room, feeling the heavy boom,
moaning at all, want me to start talkin soon
you're acting like a little kid, you dont know what you did
you just want us to be sorted
leave me alone, in my own home,
its my own life, not you'res, be gone

*chorus*
you sit and cry, thinking you feel the worst,
do you know that i was gutted first
i thought you'd understand
but you seem to have changed
you're not the girl that i once knew
and so i cannot keep on talking to you.
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sluyky
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dude u sure have talent when it comes to writing
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Si
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hahah thanks dude i apreciate that, its niced to know

thats what my songs are for though, for you guys to like
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Saturday Night by si 03

Verse
The way she looks out, she doesn't have any feeling
She can't remember, and now her head it is reeling
Head in her hands, she tries to understand
Head in her hands, she tries to make a plan
He's looking, crying, the sun sets in the horizon,

*bridge*
She cant describe, how she feels about him
he cant describe how he feels about her such a blur

Chorus
Two people, with such a connection
she looks in the mirror, stares at her reflection
he lies on his bed, he wants to see her
she wants him, wants him to be near her

verse2
She cannot understand, his love it seems to be fading
but it doesnt, coz he can never stop caring
doesnt matter, if she becomes his wife
doesnt matter, where they go in life
coz he loves her, they feel the same inside

repeat bridge
repeat chorus

*Rap*
the clouded sky, she dont know why
she feels this for him, makes her cry
he looks down, stares at the ground
his thoughts for her he feels dumbfound
she writes a letter, writes a poem
he sits at home and writes a song
they send them out, envelopes white
both them title "saturday night"

repeat chorus

*this is about 2 people un-able to show their affection for each other, and believing that one hates the other.eventually they realize through words, both titles the same*
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This one was aimed at the person from the above song (***** - angel i once knew), but for the total opposite reasons.

Death Awaits You
V1
a lonely room crowded late at night,
a troubled mind alone in the corner, waiting
blood from you're eyes, they run down you're face,
drips on the floor, i'm falling, hating
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and i know i've said this before
but i run, hide, wait and lock the door,
i love you, miss you, want to kiss you,
but i feel inside that death awaits you

Chorus
12 minutes, 12 rounds, running through my head i'm singing
flashlight in my face, cant run the race,
no space, you're falling from grace
12 minutes, 12 rounds, taking all the hate you're bringing
see more spirit, see more fire, you the angel lights my desire

V2
A 5-star hatred in my inside,
it wont disapear, from the fear im running
black inside, turn to stone i know,
i cry and i wonder i feel it burning,
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and i know i've said this before
but i run, hide, wait and lock the door,
i love you, miss you, want to kiss you,
but i feel inside that death awaits you

Repeat Chorus

*rap*
i see you smile
the light from my nightmare
the thing i most despair
is you if you dont care
i see your face
i feel your grace
but without you i feel
im dying in this place (repeat)

repeat chorus
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so doe nobody like have any opinions

"you people are made of stone" :angry:
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nomey
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your songs are brill si
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yas acknowledgement, cept for sluyks small bit earlier, wooo
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Fiji_666
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hey Si! just wanted 2 let u no i luv ur songs. theyre so true! n e way c u 2moz
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sluyky
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yup Si , there awesul mate , were so doing some of them
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Si
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of course we are sluyk,

hiya fij glad to see u joined, keep posting
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nomey
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ur songs are amazing si and ur very talented, u and sluyky will def be in the top 10 :P
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