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| Little help needed with letter of application; please check my english | |
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| Vger_art | Nov 30 2004, 06:02 PM Post #1 |
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I could use some help people, I need to respond to a job opening quick and it needs to be in english. It's just a response to a lady from a recruiting office I know and it doesn't need to be formal in any way but it does need to be in good english! Please read it and let me know if I've made any stupid mistakes, wrong verbs etc, I really need this job.
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| Sophie | Nov 30 2004, 07:12 PM Post #2 |
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The only mistake I see, is the extra space between the words 'of' and 'support'. Other then that everything else is fine. |
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| Vger_art | Nov 30 2004, 07:36 PM Post #3 |
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Thanks for the quick response T'Lac, I really appreciate it !!! It's past midnight here, she didn't reach me untill this evening and this company wants to make a decision tomorrow morning already. I looked it over myself 10 times and each time I had more and more doubts about my english. |
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| Swidden | Dec 1 2004, 01:45 AM Post #4 |
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Unless I am misreading the context I think "temporarily" should be "temporary". Other than that, and T'Lac's observation, it looks good to me... |
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| Vger_art | Dec 1 2004, 04:44 AM Post #5 |
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^^^ Thanks Swidden, if that's all I won't let it worry me too much. It's morning by now and I already talked to the lady on the phone, she sounded very enthusiastic. It's for a international support center and their first demand was: Good english. Seems I was the only candidate who bothered to respond in english in stead of dutch. All I can do now is wait for the phone to ring
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| Intrepid2002 | Dec 1 2004, 09:45 AM Post #6 |
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Sounds impressive. Hope you get the job! Good luck! |
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| Wichita | Dec 1 2004, 10:13 AM Post #7 |
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And again I am humbled to see someone communicate far better in English (which is their second language) than I can communicate in any language ... including English on occasion.
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| Fesarius | Dec 1 2004, 11:51 AM Post #8 |
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Vger_art, It looks quite good. My only question: Where you wrote-- After all, why bother with a problem if you’re not interested if it gets solved or not. Should that sentence end with a question mark? Maybe not. Best wishes.
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| Vger_art | Dec 1 2004, 01:16 PM Post #9 |
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After watching over 700 Star Trek episodes about 3 times each I couldn't help pick up some english It feels good to share my hopes with other members at SisterTrek, thanks. I do hope I get the job (still haven't heard anything yet), it's not that I need the money that bad but after all these months of doing nothing I'm turning into a cranky old man and I'm beginning to feel like Capt. Dunsel
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| Fesarius | Dec 1 2004, 01:45 PM Post #10 |
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^^^ Vger_art, I received several rejection letters years ago before I landed my first best job. I just kept plugging along, hoping for the best.... |
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| somerled | Dec 4 2004, 06:55 AM Post #11 |
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Address the requirements set out in the job specification , advertisement, briefly as possible. Briefly set out what you can offer (briefly as this should be spelled out in some detail in your CV - which will be no more than 4 to 6 pages long), keep your application under 1 page , shorter is better as they will be reading lots of letters and wont have time to read your's if it is long, grab their attention in the first paragraph is at all possible.. There are formal letter writing styles that apply to job applications, use these , even if the application is made by email. |
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| Vger_art | Dec 15 2004, 06:09 PM Post #12 |
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I had the job interview, some days ago already. It went pretty well considering the difficulties with 3 managers asking questions in english with 3 different accents, one dutchman, one brit and the third one sounded like a Klingon. They called today to let me know I didn't get the job. They figured somebody else was even better qualified. It's not the first rejection but I was perfect for this one, the bloody fools I joined a job training group and they told me to keep my CV to a max. of 2 pages?! Since I can handle more than one job I have several CV's, each emphasizing my experience (technical, commercial or financial) whatever is relevant to the job. Once the employer is interested, I can supply additional documents in more detail about my previous responsibilities. I'm more troubled what happens when they ask for references with my latest employer. I left that company after a big fight with the company's president, calling him a cheat, a thief and a liar (which he all was btw). |
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| Fesarius | Dec 16 2004, 09:09 AM Post #13 |
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Vger_art, You are well within your rights in asking them *not* to contact your current employer. When I've gone on interviews and been asked that question, I tell them 'I'd prefer you not to that until I know whether or not you are serious about me for this position'--or something similar to that. Best wishes.
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