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| Story Time!!; Only part of it cause it ain't finished | |
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| Topic Started: Apr 17 2005, 12:32 PM (265 Views) | |
| Miyavi | Apr 17 2005, 12:32 PM Post #1 |
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Ok this is part of a horror story i'm writing for a friend cause he loves horror stories and is a massive fan of Silent Hill games so could i get some opinions on it please. Thankies and huggles in advance :yayaya: The Darkness ~~~~~~~~~ Prologue ~~~~~~ It's been seven years since i had my last vision. I can't begin to describe the carnage i'd see but what made things worse was the fact that these were not people born of my imagination but people i'd see on my walks. I would vision them being torn apart by strange creatures. Creatures you couldn't dream up in your worst nightmares. Then they stopped. I felt safe, secure untill two days ago when i had one last vision. This time it wasn't someone i had seen in the streets. This time it was me and the worst part was i didn't know that this wasn't just a vision but more of a premanition of my fate. Chapter 1 ~~~~~~~ The light swung back and forth casting foul shadows across the room as he opened his eyes. He groaned as the light shone into his eyes making him squint and rub them. As he sat up a strong smell hit him making him jerk upright. He covered his nose and looked round the room. "Where in gods name am i?" he asked himself as he sat on the edge of the bed. The room looked like it hadn't seen life for decades. Soiled wallpaper clung loosely to the walls while the tiled floor was coated in stains. The windows were filthy with dust and dirt. He stood up and walked over to the window trying to see outside. "Why is it so dark?" he muttered as he squited hard to try and see anything. "Because this is a dead place" exclaimed a voice behind him. He spun round in shock only to be confronted by a woman. She smiled softly at him, her long blonde hair draped over her shoulder. She wore a white dress which seems to sway in a breeze. "Who are you?" he asked standing his ground. "If you really want to know that shouldn't you remember?" she replied. "Remember? Remember what?" He said confused. She said nothing but giggled softly. "you can't can you Karu?" "How do you know my name?" he said in deblief. Just then a pain shot through his head. He dropped to his knees clutching his head as if he was trying to push the pain out. "Come find me." she heard her say. "What do you mean find you?" he asked her without looking up. As quick as the pain had come it vanished. Karu took a deep breath and looked up into the now empty room. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This is as far as i've got so far >.< Someone said i have this tendency to not describe stuff enough and leave holes in my story. Could i get some opinions please. |
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