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| Vic, i challenge you!; To a freestyle battle! It's WAR! | |
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| daywalker2k2 | Apr 22 2004, 04:30 PM Post #61 |
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Yeah shoo keep on looking good!!!
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him or her vic :) Alyssa is trying to be one of us..a copycat :) |
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| Yo-Tai-Keizuke | Apr 22 2004, 07:42 PM Post #62 |
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Oh, okay, i see what's going on. Y'all are going down! You mentioned my name and the word "cheat" You think i'd sunk to the level of a submarine fleet? You crazy? Someboy must've knock you in the head Oh wait, you did it to Marbin when he sat close to you in bed Yes, i'm talking about you, "miss i got heat" The one that goes arround saying "I can't be beat" Well, guess what? I can and will do, how about that? You talk like you can take all us men I don't know about that, but where you've been? Your words are of no danger to us, to me Heck, bound to see better in world war 3 And, Marbin, you need Vic's permission? I've told you many times, this is reality not fiction Get it straight and act on your own Oh wait, you're the kind of man who doesn't have a phone He's always crying and feeling sad all alone Still, a girlfriend he has Just like it, it'll leave him fast To our surprise he had a baby Without getting married, is he crazy? To think he would give her the name of a machine Just goes to show, Marbin, he's not what he seems He's just one crazy man, one crazy boy, and one crazy dude Feeling sorry cause his girlfriend him never understood Vic, stop trying, do something cause talk is cheap Get back in the ring and show me the meaning of sheep Your blows are just as soft Her moons, but no bigger than Lare Croft's Don't care if you don't understand I forgot where that was my problem man But, Vic, i bet you must know what i am talking about Your age, your experience, sure wouldn't leave you left out Then again, what constitutes it being junk? Is it eye of the beholder or the brain full of skunk? Either way could go here But, one thing is clear Y'all's threats, i don't fear lol :) |
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"though the ocean is big...but it can wave and do a lot of tricks." -Val- Xbox Live Gamertag ![]() ![]() credits: Thanks to Jess (Shouling) Caliente like a volcano But beautifully bright as the sun She's my angel sistah Her name is lady Madison Yo-Tai-Keizuke Ukaji A.K.A (Also Known As) Edwin Express Love: (Kuai Ti Ai Qin) Hurry now Don't wait for time to pass you by Find a way to keep the sparks, alive alive Hurry now Don't let that someone pass you by Make the passion esscalate | |
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| Seoul Survivor | Apr 22 2004, 11:17 PM Post #63 |
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Thanks Jay!
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Look at all those words. And nothing at all said. Valerie (Vietpucca) puts up a short simple poem, that makes sense, has a clear message and rhymes. While Dedwin, who I am convinced suffers from APD (Awful Poetry Disease) types and type and types, and says nothing at all. What a terrible waste of bits and bytes. //Seoul |
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| Winged VoX | Apr 22 2004, 11:37 PM Post #64 |
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The Natural Playboy
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Man...I feel like throwing down my own rhymes myself. Not because of Edwin or anyone else's influence. I just might need to start practicing and honing my craft of the game for the summer. Plus, I don't want any backlash from Vic, haha. |
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| Seoul Survivor | Apr 23 2004, 02:42 AM Post #65 |
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Thanks Jay!
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Yeah, Arnell, and the "Backlash" cannon is well oiled, my friend. Type all the poetry you want. Even send it to the printer, if you're especially proud of it, just do NOT hit SEND! (Hint: Before posting, SAVE your poems, for one day. Read them a day later. If they make sense, have the correct pentameter, and aren't too "goofy" then post them. I don't hate poetry, just BAD poetry!) //Seoul Join "Mary's Kids" on the May Day Telethon, to save the world from APD. (Awful Poetry Disorder) It's a disease that people (see: Dedwin) have and don't know it... |
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| Winged VoX | Apr 23 2004, 11:41 AM Post #66 |
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The Natural Playboy
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You know, I wasn't even thinking of it as poetry. Did my poetry long ago when I was a young lad back in middle school. I was just going to throw out some freestyle. Future job (you know the future job) requires me to have a sense of flow or else it would sound like poorly done poetry. But don't worry. Whenever I usually think up a few rhymes, they stay in the head. They never go down on paper or on internet based text. It's just stuff that comes from the top of my head. I'll just do the right thing and leave all bashings from you for Edwin. Practice part of my future job in private. |
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| daywalker2k2 | Apr 23 2004, 03:51 PM Post #67 |
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Yeah shoo keep on looking good!!!
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Ok let me jump into since i got fired back... Man alyssa did you say cheat please you cant admin just being beat I knocked alyssa on her head and no we were not in bed besides alyssa went to new york and come back like she ate bad pork if we are toys then girls are tools yeah you heard right we use them as we please I did lay hand on you and counted to three but by the time i was done you were down on your knees crush me with your shoe... all filled with poo poo i dont think you can lay a kick on me if you did i would let you count to three and just maybe let you flee take your earrings off real quick but chose to pick do you want to do or die your choice or you could just bye want to see blood..please alyysa you would probly pass out and you would end in a serious bout losing blood as you pout i am going to let you go cause you are my girl but then again dont go to new york and eat that bad pork it made you talk like you were a dork Edwin i see you are once agian talking this and that as usual reporting bullsh*t facts I am on my own man and for sure i have a plan You say i dont got a phone then why is it when i call you the thing that shakes is your tone I could get girlfriend anytime but i am trying to find the one they call mine did i have baby just maybe I may be a crazy dude but you might as well call yourself MR. Crude Yeah my girlfriend never understood me she said it was not you she said it was edwin smelling like poo Now dont mess with vic or he is going to be bitting you like a tick choose your pick it is either vic or a kick i say give him both vic remember he come from puerto ric And usally they think they are slick Hehe i am out once again. |
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| Yo-Tai-Keizuke | Apr 27 2004, 08:50 AM Post #68 |
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H.O.T's Wu Jiok
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Marbin, rhyming, i wish you never started Damn, that was a dud, are you retarted? After that how you think i'm supposed to feel? I'm like "Whoa, is he for real?" Bet your grandma can rhyme better than you She'll even sunk me faster than a submarine crew Marbin Marbin Marbin, come here Pay attention to your ear Listen, it's quite simple, almost clear You gotta have flow, ya know? Know the difference between heat and sknow One burns one freezes, that's how it goes And, you're burning without freezing anything up Just follow these simeple guidelines and don't ever stop Soon my friend, with my help, you'll make your way to the top Vic's an adult, a big boy He don't need no one defending his toy So, Marbin, i'm sure he appreciates the support But, you forgot the telegram, the repport It says "Sophia's man, don't ever butt in my life" When i read that i was like "Yo, Vic, high five!" I just couldn't believe it He'd be with her every minute Though soon found out there was a downside to all Vic started moping around and having late night calls It was not Sophia, but Vic himself He started doubting everyone else He spoke the word "Soap" and it all came clear The preminition of this organization was getting near Only one man stands before my dreams and my eyes A man so hot and sexy, it makes me realize The ending sure will be a fun surprise |
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"though the ocean is big...but it can wave and do a lot of tricks." -Val- Xbox Live Gamertag ![]() ![]() credits: Thanks to Jess (Shouling) Caliente like a volcano But beautifully bright as the sun She's my angel sistah Her name is lady Madison Yo-Tai-Keizuke Ukaji A.K.A (Also Known As) Edwin Express Love: (Kuai Ti Ai Qin) Hurry now Don't wait for time to pass you by Find a way to keep the sparks, alive alive Hurry now Don't let that someone pass you by Make the passion esscalate | |
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| Seoul Survivor | Apr 27 2004, 09:00 PM Post #69 |
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Thanks Jay!
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YOu know what the problem with that poem is, Edwin? It does, in fact (somewhat) rhyme. The topics you've chosen are relavent. The problem is that it is ORDINARY. I t uses lots and lots and lots of words, but doesn't inspire, nor teach, nor cause any form of emotion. (Sincere hint: Next time you're at Blockbuster, there is an older film, called "Dead Poet's Society". Watch it. In fact, watch it twice.) It is not a funny film, I don't know what, if any awards it won. But you will learn a LOT from it. And maybe that will translate into your poems, and I can quit pestering you about them. //Seoul P.S., One of the main reasons I don't want to get involved with a thread like this, is that I am no more a poet, than I am a brain surgeon. Watch the film. |
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| Yo-Tai-Keizuke | Apr 28 2004, 12:28 AM Post #70 |
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Haven't seen the movie, Vic. I'll check it out. And, these aren't poems, these are freestyle rhymes, like rap. So, yeah, it sucks. Tell me something i don't know. lol All in good fun, like you always say, my friend. :) |
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"though the ocean is big...but it can wave and do a lot of tricks." -Val- Xbox Live Gamertag ![]() ![]() credits: Thanks to Jess (Shouling) Caliente like a volcano But beautifully bright as the sun She's my angel sistah Her name is lady Madison Yo-Tai-Keizuke Ukaji A.K.A (Also Known As) Edwin Express Love: (Kuai Ti Ai Qin) Hurry now Don't wait for time to pass you by Find a way to keep the sparks, alive alive Hurry now Don't let that someone pass you by Make the passion esscalate | |
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| Yo-Tai-Keizuke | Apr 28 2004, 06:13 AM Post #71 |
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SooJin, she's so nice So lovely, full of spice But, lately i'm like "Sweetie, don't listen to O B Trice" She says "Why not? I wanna show you a surprise" She giggles and starts chasing my A$$ with a gun I run as fast as i can and say "Sweetheart, this is no fun!" She then says "I was just playing, sweetie" "Come to bed and sign this treaty" I then say "You sure? Okay, lady Twitty" She gets furious, angry, and asks "WHO'S THAT?!" "Boy you better start running before i hit you with this bat!" Yeah, she carries knifes, guns, and bats when she's around me She takes our relationship very very seriously I'm like "cupcake, calm down" "I had my mind all to the way in the ground" "I wasn't thinking straight" "Please, sweetie, give me a break" She's like "Okay, i will" "But don't ever lie to me, or you'll know how it feels" "To be castrated in front of your own wife" "Remember you have one? You'll have five" See what i have to deal with? Vic, your stuff in comparison aren't big That's why i don't even bid If i did Trust me, seeing you guys again... She would forbid lol :) |
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"though the ocean is big...but it can wave and do a lot of tricks." -Val- Xbox Live Gamertag ![]() ![]() credits: Thanks to Jess (Shouling) Caliente like a volcano But beautifully bright as the sun She's my angel sistah Her name is lady Madison Yo-Tai-Keizuke Ukaji A.K.A (Also Known As) Edwin Express Love: (Kuai Ti Ai Qin) Hurry now Don't wait for time to pass you by Find a way to keep the sparks, alive alive Hurry now Don't let that someone pass you by Make the passion esscalate | |
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| Seoul Survivor | Apr 28 2004, 10:21 PM Post #72 |
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Thanks Jay!
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OH Geez..... And this close to dinner. Whenever you thnk "Edwin's poetry can't get any worse", it does. And he just slings it, like one of those manure machines that they pull behide a tractor on a farm. Quotoing Arnell: " You know, I wasn't even thinking of it as poetry." Good, it wasn't. Quoting the Poetry Monster: "Yeah, she carries knifes, guns, and bats when she's around me She takes our relationship very very seriously" She's also a card carrying member of SOAP and PEST. Quoting Marbin: "besides alyssa went to new york and come back like she ate bad pork" Yuppers, bad poetry does that to them every time... Back to Arnell: "Practice part of my future job in private." New job as what? Ivan the Impaler? Jeez.. This stuff is really awful.. Watch the film, Poetry Monster, watch the film... //Seoul |
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| Yo-Tai-Keizuke | Apr 29 2004, 02:00 AM Post #73 |
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Trust me, this aint poetry. All these stuff i write i don't take it seriously, it's all for fun.
:) In this thread i'm just freestyling, that's why is horrible, cause is funny. When you Vic see me naming the following verse with a name, that's when you'll know is poetry. lol Then again, the more i say this aint poetry, the more you say it is...who's the critic here? Certainly not me. lol My baby SooJin just ate dinner Eats and eats, just keeps getting thinner I'm like "Sweetie, i wish i could work your magic" "Edwin, if you did, it be tragic" "Darling, may i ask why?" "Face it, you would die" She then says "Oh wait, that aint a bad idea" "Edwin, got more food, come hee-a" "SooJin, you're scaring me..." "I mean it, seriously" She then says "Look, i prepared more, see?" "Don't worry, you know i love you...heehee" "Sweetie, what's that smile?" "You've had it for quite a while" She says "I'm just happy you're with me" "C'mon, just have some of this tea" Drank the tea and counted to three I then said "SooJin...you need therapy" Before i knew it i passed out and fell on the floor She dragged me all the way to the house's fron door She decorated my body with flowers She then said "He's body should decontaminate whithin an hour" What she meant by decontamination Was Edwin's poetry infection She loves him, but she's had enough Since she's been with him, it's all been rough Apparently it all was poetry and no love She then says "I don't care who you be" "Hearing his poetry constantly" "Will make you one day kill him eventually" "So, my dear Edwin, today you i bury" I'll miss you...very" |
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"though the ocean is big...but it can wave and do a lot of tricks." -Val- Xbox Live Gamertag ![]() ![]() credits: Thanks to Jess (Shouling) Caliente like a volcano But beautifully bright as the sun She's my angel sistah Her name is lady Madison Yo-Tai-Keizuke Ukaji A.K.A (Also Known As) Edwin Express Love: (Kuai Ti Ai Qin) Hurry now Don't wait for time to pass you by Find a way to keep the sparks, alive alive Hurry now Don't let that someone pass you by Make the passion esscalate | |
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| Seoul Survivor | Apr 29 2004, 02:16 AM Post #74 |
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Jeez, Life is much too short to wade through all that crap. Edwin, sorry to inform you, but 'You ain't a poet". It is as simple as that. You may be an excellent brain surgeon. An excellent baseball (what ever that is) player, a stockbroker, or at least a Blockbuster franchisee. But Poet: NOPE. Don't waste your time. Learn from this now. (and watch the film!!!!!!!) All your verses are ORDINARY. Wiser words may have never been spoken. //Seoul |
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| Yo-Tai-Keizuke | Apr 29 2004, 02:21 AM Post #75 |
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Who said i was? Not me, i'm not. Others do, but popularity does not equate to truth or reality. |
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"though the ocean is big...but it can wave and do a lot of tricks." -Val- Xbox Live Gamertag ![]() ![]() credits: Thanks to Jess (Shouling) Caliente like a volcano But beautifully bright as the sun She's my angel sistah Her name is lady Madison Yo-Tai-Keizuke Ukaji A.K.A (Also Known As) Edwin Express Love: (Kuai Ti Ai Qin) Hurry now Don't wait for time to pass you by Find a way to keep the sparks, alive alive Hurry now Don't let that someone pass you by Make the passion esscalate | |
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| Yo-Tai-Keizuke | Apr 29 2004, 02:39 AM Post #76 |
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Sorry for the double post. To me, poems are like a Reeses peanut butter cup, you guys seen the commercial? It goes like "There's no wrong way to eat a Reeses". Poems being like "There's no wrong way to write a poem". BUT! If there ever was such way! It be me. LOL!!!!! So, why should i brake the tradition? lol Hey, Vic, thought i show you this poem. Now, believe me, this wasn't written by me, as you'll see. lol It was actually written by Jonathan Nater, a well known writer and poet that i've known since High school. What'd you think? Poem called: Life's Own Teachings A seed slowly grows if time is given But, just like any human being Growth comes from other things Like the bond of friendship and love between Life aint just a one way track We're not just born to die Let yourself open to experience But do not just live, try Love can be so precious So beautiful, so unbelievable Find that special someone And make your love insatiable A person's character Is one of it's most fascinating qualities Be and believe in yourself, don't let anyboy Derive the way your were brought by your family Respect and pride Two aspects not that easy to feel Just make sure You know what's important to you and what is real An argument Can lead to chaos But an understanding Can lead to aid us In the end The grades at school, isn't going to prepare while you've alive But the small knowledge you're consuming as a person It's going to differ whether you're ready to walk or run through life |
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"though the ocean is big...but it can wave and do a lot of tricks." -Val- Xbox Live Gamertag ![]() ![]() credits: Thanks to Jess (Shouling) Caliente like a volcano But beautifully bright as the sun She's my angel sistah Her name is lady Madison Yo-Tai-Keizuke Ukaji A.K.A (Also Known As) Edwin Express Love: (Kuai Ti Ai Qin) Hurry now Don't wait for time to pass you by Find a way to keep the sparks, alive alive Hurry now Don't let that someone pass you by Make the passion esscalate | |
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| Seoul Survivor | Apr 29 2004, 06:15 PM Post #77 |
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Thanks Jay!
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Don't know that he would get his photo on the front of "Better Poems and Gardens", but it isn't bad. Some of it I agree with, some I do not. //Seoul |
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| Yo-Tai-Keizuke | Apr 29 2004, 09:06 PM Post #78 |
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Good, cause i lied. I wrote that. You inspired it, though. :) |
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"though the ocean is big...but it can wave and do a lot of tricks." -Val- Xbox Live Gamertag ![]() ![]() credits: Thanks to Jess (Shouling) Caliente like a volcano But beautifully bright as the sun She's my angel sistah Her name is lady Madison Yo-Tai-Keizuke Ukaji A.K.A (Also Known As) Edwin Express Love: (Kuai Ti Ai Qin) Hurry now Don't wait for time to pass you by Find a way to keep the sparks, alive alive Hurry now Don't let that someone pass you by Make the passion esscalate | |
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| Seoul Survivor | Apr 29 2004, 11:40 PM Post #79 |
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That doesn't surprise me. Hence my cautious answer. The poem lacks lacks passion. "The cat sat on the mat". (A quote from Dead Poet's Society, SEE THE FILM, Edwin!!! This particular scene vividly explains EXACTLY what I'm saying!!) It reeks of "Ordinary-ism" (a word I just made up) When you write poetry, it MUST be MORE important to you than your next breath. Elsewise hit DELETE, and do something else. //Seoul Notes on the film Dead Poet's Society. First, there is NO violence. No sex, no vulgar language. But it packs some very powerful messages. The star is Robin Williams, (He is NOT a comic in this film!!) I Strongly suggest renting it!! I believe the film is rated PG. |
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| Yo-Tai-Keizuke | May 1 2004, 11:20 PM Post #80 |
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My question to you Vic is "Are you being serious?" If so, that means you do care about my poetry. But, most of the stuff you see here at KMR, i could care less cause that is made for laughter or to make someone feel special. I don't care if it's crap, cause believe me it is. If it can make others laugh, why not? The only poems i care about are the ones that are poem dedications because those come from my heart, how i feel. I just do it for fun and if it comes to a point where is no longer fun, it's not worth it. By the way, thanks, oh captain, my captain. :) One thing, what does this mean? When walking through a Melon patch, don't adjust your sandals. |
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"though the ocean is big...but it can wave and do a lot of tricks." -Val- Xbox Live Gamertag ![]() ![]() credits: Thanks to Jess (Shouling) Caliente like a volcano But beautifully bright as the sun She's my angel sistah Her name is lady Madison Yo-Tai-Keizuke Ukaji A.K.A (Also Known As) Edwin Express Love: (Kuai Ti Ai Qin) Hurry now Don't wait for time to pass you by Find a way to keep the sparks, alive alive Hurry now Don't let that someone pass you by Make the passion esscalate | |
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